Appellate Briefs: Vary the Pace

On 15 November 2009, in Persuasive Writing, by Peter Smythe

At the water­coo­ler the other day, one of my down-​the-​hall collea­gues cran­ked up a dis­cus­sion about per­sua­sive wri­ting. He had just come back from the office of an old-​time appe­llate law­yer and pratt­led on about how this guy’s brief didn’t have a sen­tence in it lon­ger than five words. “Cric­key, even my ten-​year old could […]

At the water­coo­ler the other day, one of my down-​the-​hall collea­gues cran­ked up a dis­cus­sion about per­sua­sive wri­ting. He had just come back from the office of an old-​time appe­llate law­yer and pratt­led on about how this guy’s brief didn’t have a sen­tence in it lon­ger than five words. “Cric­key, even my ten-​year old could read that!”

While bre­vity and cla­rity usually go hand-​in-​hand, some­ti­mes it’s good to vary the length of your sen­ten­ces to influence the reader’s speed. For exam­ple, Gary Pro­vost in his book, 100 Ways to Improve Your Wri­ting, demons­tra­tes the truth how the five-​word-​sentence rule might be one to avoid.

This sen­tence has five words. Here are five more words. Five-​word sen­ten­ces are fine. But seve­ral together become mono­to­nous. Lis­ten to what is hap­pe­ning. The wri­ting is get­ting boring. The sound of it dro­nes. It’s like a stuck record. The ear demands some variety. Now lis­ten. I vary the sen­tence length, and I create music. Music. The wri­ting sings. It has a plea­sant rhythm, a lilt, a har­mony. I use short sen­ten­ces. And I use sen­ten­ces of medium length. And some­ti­mes, when I am cer­tain the rea­der is res­ted, I will engage him with a sen­tence of con­si­de­ra­ble length, a sen­tence that burns with energy and builds with all the impe­tus of a cres­cendo, the roll of the drums, the crash of the cym­bals – sounds that say lis­ten to this, it is important.

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